Tuesday, February 21, 2012
2.21a
Daniel pulled the gun out of the holster, but Maria couldn't stop weeping. It killed him every time a tear pulled itself out of her lovely eyes. He cocked the weapon and held it to her head.
"Stop crying," he demanded.
She coughed, trying to regain her breath, but couldn't stop the tears.
He decided he would rather never see her cry again, rather than deal with a single tear more.
He pulled the trigger.
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Wow. Daniel seems to be a guy who takes things to extremes. He needs some conflict resolution classes, I'm guessing.
ReplyDeleteWhat kind of gun was it? Like, is this a water pistol or airsoft or a nerf gun, or what?
ReplyDeleteI refuse to believe that it's something else.
Oh, Robby.
See, Janelle, you're nicer than me. I totally thought real gun, but then maybe my brain's still thinking through Castle plot implications. :D
ReplyDeleteI was writing a better action scene than a cat-podium author.
ReplyDeleteI wanted to prove that it wasn't that difficult. Make a situation people care about. Put HUMANS into it. Resolve situation in a way that makes people care.
Easy.
Cat podiums can't do it.
Yes, I'm in agreement with you here.
ReplyDelete1) It is a better action scene--even with the little you've given us, the people are distinct from each other, motivation is hinted at, and emotion is there.
2) Yes, cat podiums can't do it. This is like an axiom or something. Shoot, a cat could probably do better than a cat podium.
Why do you keep writing things just to prove you're better? Everybody knows that already.
ReplyDeleteWell, I don't think so. And thank you for your vote of confidence.
ReplyDeleteCAT PODIUMS